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As the leaves touched the ground
tears fell from my eyes.
For I have seen what I've become,
the progress of what I am.

I am like a tree in spring
whose leaves brought shade to all.
And as I greet my dearest sunshine
I smiled at how I withstood the fall.

I am like a tree in summer,
basking under the mighty sun.
Celebrated life and its glory
by sharing life and making memories.

I am like a tree in autumn
whose leaves slowly withered.
Yet as my leaves kissed the soil,
a thousand friends I have garnered.

I am like a tree in winter,
blistered by the freezing cold.
But never did I give up hope
I know spring is my home.

Through the seasons I have learned
that our life is like a tree.
Though the winds could bring us down
These winds breathe life into our stories.

And as the leaves touched the ground,
a smile flashed from my lips.
I am glad of what I've become
and the process of becoming it.
An entry for :iconfotofriday:'s anniversary contest.

Inpired by [link]

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sumirehana013 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2007
I really love this! :D the words were well-chosen and the message of this poem was really striking! :D

5 claps for ~damnedlostsoul
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2007
hahaha... five claps nga...

salamat...
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Amanda-San Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Through the seasons I have learned
that our life is like a tree.
'Cause though the winds could bring us down
These winds breathe life into our stories.

My favorite verse. :)

I really like the connection you make throughout this poem as people are trees- it makes a lot of sense. We are indeed trees, and our seasons reflect our emotions and vise versa. This one also reads very very well.

If I were to make any even slightly negative comment, it would be about your use of the word "because". I think the 'cause abbreviation is a little cliche.
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2007
glad you liked it....

would it be better if I remove the word 'cause?
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Amanda-San Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Hm. It just might. All up to you though.
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Renegade-Hamster Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2007
Ha. Really good rhythm, you've created beautiful similies.
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:icondamnedlostsoul:
damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2007
Thanks for the fave. Ive spent two hours or so on this one... :p
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Renegade-Hamster Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2007
It shows. It's really well constructed.
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eldris Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
Your art has been featured in *TalentHaven's monthly article: [link] :love:
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2007
Once again, a million thanks to you. :)
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