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Tonight,

my tears

will blanket

the sky,

my sorrow

will darken


the corners of heaven


and my longing

will echo


across the moonless night.

Tonight I will depart
from this existence

and like meteors

our memories

will leave a trail

of bittersweet  moments.

I will be missing you

and I know


I always will.

For in the darkness
of oblivion,

your smile was


my Polaris.


My star whose light

was brighter

than anything else.

My comfort.

My sanctuary.

My Eden.


And as  my tears


blanket

the sky


tonight,


I will brave

my greatest fear.

That before the strike
of sunlight's rays,

I will not lose my star

to my fear of loving her.


I will confess my feelings.

No matter what happens.

No matter what it takes.


I am in love with you.


And I know



I always will be.
Something I wrote before I got promoted..


The last day that I will be able to see her often...
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TTitanGO Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011
This is really good. I like it! :D
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LindseyJean324 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
this poem is exactly what i have been trying to put on paper i just could never get it.. i really adore this one.. just one thing i would change.. the last line i always will.. i would make it i always will be.. i personally think it would fit better other than that two thumbs up!
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
Hmmm... I have considered your suggestion. :) It does sound better now. Thank you.
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LindseyJean324 Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
your welcome☻
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DraketheFallen1 Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2008
Good job, though the layout needs a bit of work. Still, good work!
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:icondamnedlostsoul:
damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
Thank you.. I will experiment on the layout later...
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:iconermitanyongiskagero:
ermitanyongiskagero Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2008
3rd line from the last tol, may kulang..

iba talga pag inlab..
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
salamat... di ko napansin... yan naedit ko na...
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ermitanyongiskagero Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2008
ayus lang bro..
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xXxPimpinPenguinxXx Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2008
LOVE IT
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
Glad that you do... thanks... :)
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kLiT-sHy Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2008
love not to cage. to love and to love much must not hurt us. i am proud of you. =)
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
:hug:
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chugglepuff Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2008
Really lovely, Rob. "my tears will blanket the sky" and "your smile was my Polaris" are really superb images. They say a lot in so few words. I wouldn't repeat the idea of tears blanketing the sky, though; because it is an unusual phrase, it really sticks out that you've used it twice, and I didn't feel you needed to draw attention to it by repeating it because it drew my attention by itself. I think it would be great if you could think of something equally beautiful with a similar meaning the second time. The only other thing is that the last 3 lines don't make sense. I think it should either be "I am in love with you. And I know I always will be," or "I love you. And I know I always will." You seem to have sort of amalgamated those two. ;P Still, wonderful, wonderful work. I really do hope it all works out for you.
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
I wanted to put emphasis on that phrase thats why I wrote it twice.. I will try to come up with an alternative...
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chugglepuff Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
If you wanted t o put emphasis on it then it certainly worked, don't change it if you like it as it is!
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
Aight. :) Thanks Bry. :)
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Loxoos Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2008
Wow, that is awesome.. To be honest, i nearly cried. It reflects my feelings so well..
*snivel* Bravo!
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
thank you.. that means so much to me. :)
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Loxoos Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
It is exaclty how i feel. Thank you for making this.
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
You're very much welcome. :)
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d-e-j-i Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2008
wah gandaa~
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
tenkyu...
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sarjan Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
ganda dude!
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damnedlostsoul Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008
salamat... :)
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sarjan Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
no prob^^
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